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*(IPR was addressed as follows in the call-for-comments notice : If you are a Participant in the IAWG be sure to make any claims to IPR regarding this draft recommendation by using the comment form. If you are not Participants in IAWG you have no IPR licensing obligation to any of these documents.) |
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Comments:
1. Line 55 “No requirements found …”
It is entirely unclear what this sentence means. Please restate this in a positive sense so we know who/what these requirements DO apply to.
Editor's Response:
Language updated
2. Lines 80-85 Please rewrite this in English.
Use multiple simple sentences. This is a one-sentence paragraph that is not intelligible.
Editor's Response:
Language updated
3. Add a section at line 86 or line 93
“Revocation – There must be a supported mechanism by which an identity subject can alter or withdraw a previously submitted informed consent.”
Editor's Response:
Language updated
4. Line 139 Add an acronym key to the end of the document
Editor's Response:
Acronym chart added to the end of the document.
5. Make TFET link a live link (in the intro).
Editor's Response:
Agreed. Completed
6. Per list discussion, Sec 2.9 has been removed from the document